Trifextra Writing Challenge: 66 word story
The Trifextra Writing Challenge is a writing challenge that happens every weekend- and it's a lightning fast one at that! This week, the challenge is to add 33 words to this 33-word story:
The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction. She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.
 |
| thanks to wb-skinner on DeviantArt for this image |
The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction. She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.
She had spent hundred years collecting as much as possible, and there was never enough happiness in the world to fill a bottle.
But sorrow was black as tar and filled entire rooms.
Happy Weekend! Be back tomorrow with Sunday Scribblings :)
Although I don't agree with the philosophy, the writing was adroit, compact and moving. What a great line in:
ReplyDelete"sorrow was black as tar and filled entire rooms."
I felt that line as a punch in my belly. Sad.
Thank you. Randy
Thanks for the comment, Randy.
DeleteYes, I'd like to think you could gather more happiness (if we try) but this is moving and well written.
ReplyDeleteThe thing about great happiness is that it is fleeting when compared to great sorrow, which stays. Thanks for the comment.
DeleteSad tune but written elegantly
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ruby
Deletethis is sad, and the last line truly 'black'. but, i must say, who would want to bottle happiness? it should be free to shine anywhere it wants (:
ReplyDeletedon't we all try to gather a little happiness to ourselves? thanks for the comment.
DeleteNice take on the prompt. Makes me curious where the story could go.
ReplyDeletethanks, me too:) maybe i should expand it.
DeleteCollecting happiness...don't we all try? I'd like to think she could fill a bottle after 100 years. Beautiful start to a story.
ReplyDeleteSome people are just unlucky :) Thank you, Gina.
DeleteVery sad. Great writing.
ReplyDeleteThe picture is effective but you gave even better visuals in your words! Walls dripping with tar, vs lighter than air wishes.
ReplyDeleteTrifecta can't stump good writers, even with stiff word limits. Great job! Thanks for sharing.
This is some really good writing :D
ReplyDelete